Intentional Homicide and Premature Death

TMA 03 Marking grid 22B
The tables on the following pages explain what your tutor will be looking for when they mark this assignment. When you look at the table, you
Part 1
Provide a one-page plan for your essay. The plan may be in the form of a mind map, diagram, list of points, or section-by-section plan. There is no word count for
this part of your assignment but do ensure that it fits on one side of an A4 sheet of paper.
Part 1 is not awarded separate marks but non-submission of this part of the TMA will result in your mark being capped at 54 for Part 2.
Part 2
Drawing on the discussions in Chapter 5 and Week 9 of the VLE, summarise the claim that there are ‘other causes of premature death that should be receiving
greater political and social attention than intentional homicide’ (Drake and Scott, 2019, p. 116).
Marks available for Part 1: 85
Word limit: 1000 words
85 per cent of overall mark
Criteria and
Weighting
Percentage
Pass 1
Excellent Pass
Pass 2
Good Pass
Pass 3
Clear Pass
Pass 4
Bare Pass
Bare Fail/Fail Bad Fail
Addresses
question directly
and
comprehensively
25 marks
Excellent pass answers
will adhere strictly to
the question,
summarising the claim
that there are ‘other
causes of premature
death that should be
Good pass answers will
adhere strictly to the
question.
Your answer will largely
be devoted to
summarising the
Clear pass answers will
summarise the argument
in some detail. However,
you are likely to spend a
significant amount of time
discussing topics such as
homicide rates
To reach this band, your
answer must make
some attempt to
summarise the claim.
However, this discussion
is likely to be
underdeveloped and
Answers in this
band must make
some reference
to avoidable
deaths. However,
there will be no
attempt to
Bad fail answers
will bear no
relation to the
question being
asked. Instead,
they may simply
outline the topics
Criteria and
Weighting
Percentage
Pass 1
Excellent Pass
Pass 2
Good Pass
Pass 3
Clear Pass
Pass 4
Bare Pass
Bare Fail/Fail Bad Fail
receiving greater
political and social
attention than
intentional homicide’.
Your answer may
briefly touch upon the
attention paid to
homicide rates, but
these will not detract
from the argument
against in any way.
22-25 marks
argument that there are
‘other causes of
premature death that
should be receiving
greater political and social
attention than intentional
homicide’. However, it
may go beyond a brief
discussion of homicides,
looking at related topics
such as homicide rates in
an international context.
18-21 marks
internationally or criminal
blame.
Answers here may also
focus on evaluating the
claim itself or spend a lot
of time talking about the
links between inequality
and intentional homicide.
14-17 marks
may only state that the
argument exists, rather
than summarising it.
There will be some focus
on avoidable deaths, but
a large part of your
discussion may be
devoted to discussing
premature death more
generally.
11-13 marks
summarise the
argument, and
your discussion is
likely to centre
around homicide
or who should be
held to account
for avoidable
deaths.
4-10 marks
covered in the
study materials,
your thoughts on
punishment or
provide a summary
of the work you
have completed so
far.
0-3 marks
Use of module
materials in
Chapter 5 and
Week 9 of the VLE
to back up your
arguments:
25 marks
While it is not
necessary to draw
upon material
from both the VLE
and Chapter 5,
Excellent pass answers
will use the material in
Chapter 5 and/or
Week 9 of the VLE to
summarise the claim
that other types of
avoidable deaths
should receive greater
amounts of attention
than intentional
homicide, providing
examples to show why
this is the case.
Your discussion will
show a developing
Good pass answers will
draw upon your work in
Chapter 5 and/or Week 9
of the VLE for your
discussion.
However, your answer
may start to bring in
materials not directly
related to the topic you
are discussing.
Your answer will show an
awareness of the need to
focus on only the most
relevant details in your
examples. It will also begin
Clear pass answers will
make clear reference to
the materials in Chapter 5
and/or Week 9 of the VLE.
However, these materials
will not be integrated into
your discussion as well as
in higher bands, and you
may rely on outside
sources to back up your
arguments.
Your discussion may also
be short on detail and
refer to an example in
passing rather than
Bare pass answers will
make some direct
reference to the
material in Chapter 5
and/or Week 9 of the
VLE but may also include
a good bit of material
from other sources.
Answers here will
discuss avoidable deaths
in some way, but your
discussion will be lacking
in detail and the
connection between
your example and the
Answers in the
bare fail and fail
bands will make
no direct
reference to the
materials in
Chapter 5 and/or
Week 9 of the
VLE.
Instead, your
discussion may be
illustrated with
materials drawn
from other
module materials
Bad fail answers
will make no
reference to any of
the ideas or
examples
contained in
Chapter 5 and/or
Week 9 of the VLE
and it will be
doubtful whether
you have studied
the work in this
part of the module.
0-3 marks
Criteria and
Weighting
Percentage
Pass 1
Excellent Pass
Pass 2
Good Pass
Pass 3
Clear Pass
Pass 4
Bare Pass
Bare Fail/Fail Bad Fail
students who are
able to draw links
between these
should be
rewarded for their
efforts.
ability to focus on key
aspects of examples, in
order to back up your
arguments. It is likely
to go beyond simple
description and will
start to use concepts
such as inequality to
support your
arguments.
22-25 marks
to draw links between
examples and the claim,
although there may be
some weaknesses in this
aspect of your work.
18-21 marks
relating it to your
summary. Conversely,
your discussion may be
largely descriptive, with
little discussion of how
your example relates to
the argument.
14-17 marks
claim will not always be
clear.
Overall, there will be
some attempt to use the
work in the book and/or
VLE, and it will be clear
that this material has
been studied.
11-13 marks
or outside
sources. If
avoidable deaths
and homicide are
referred to with
no direct
reference to the
module materials,
your essay will be
placed in the
higher end of the
band.
4-10 marks
Essay structure
15 marks
An excellent pass
answer will have a
logical structure with
an introduction that
clearly relates to the
question; a main body
divided into
paragraphs, and a
conclusion that sums
up the essay.
Your answer will begin
by outlining the claim
that other forms of
premature death
should receive more
Good pass answers will
contain an introduction
and conclusion.
The main body of your
essay will build gradually,
starting with a summary
of the claim before setting
out your examples.
However, the transition
between your ideas will be
less well-executed than in
an excellent pass answer
and there may be
uncertainty as to when
Clear pass answers will
make some attempt to
introduce the essay.
However, your
introduction is likely to be
short and there may be
little discussion of the
claim you will be
considering before you
move into your first
example.
There will be some
attempt to break your
answer up into
paragraphs, but you will
Bare pass answers will
have significant
problems with
structure. They may not
include an introduction
and conclusion and you
are likely to jump
straight into your
argument without any
discussion of the claim
that other forms of
premature death should
receive more attention
than intentional
homicide.
Fail answers will
not be written in
paragraph form
and will instead
use lists, tables or
drawings.
0-4 marks
Criteria and
Weighting
Percentage
Pass 1
Excellent Pass
Pass 2
Good Pass
Pass 3
Clear Pass
Pass 4
Bare Pass
Bare Fail/Fail Bad Fail
attention than
intentional homicide
before moving on to
demonstrate why this
is the case.
Each paragraph will be
clearly relevant to the
essay question, contain
one key point, and will
build logically on the
previous point.
14-15 marks
one paragraph should end,
and the next begin.
Any weaknesses in
structure will not detract
from the readability of the
essay.
11-13 marks
have difficulty deciding
when to do so.
Your conclusion is likely to
be short and may
introduce new ideas that
were not discussed in the
main body.
7-10 marks
Your answer is likely to
be written as one
continuous paragraph,
leading to uncertainty
over where one example
ends and another
begins. It may also skip
around from point to
point without any clear
narrative.
5-6 marks
Criteria and
Weighting
Percentage
Pass 1
Excellent Pass
Pass 2
Good Pass
Pass 3
Clear Pass
Pass 4
Bare Pass
Bare Fail/Fail Bad Fail
Writing skills
15 marks
To reach the excellent
pass band, your essay
must be written in your
own words, and not be
copied or closely
paraphrased from the
module materials.
Short quotations can be
included in the
discussion of your
To achieve a mark in the
good pass band, your
essay must be written in
your own words, but it is
likely to be more closely
paraphrased than an
excellent answer. You may
also be reliant on longer
quotations to explain your
points.
A clear pass answer will
show a clear attempt to
write in your own words
although you may use
lengthy quotations or
paraphrase very closely for
much of it. It is also likely
to closely follow the
narrative of the materials.
Punctuation will be used,
although there will be
In a bare pass answer
large chunks of the
material will be copied
directly from the module
materials.
There may also be
numerous spelling
mistakes, poor
punctuation and
incomplete sentences,
Bare fail/fail
answers will be
difficult to follow.
They may contain
very long
sentences or so
many spelling and
grammatical
errors that your
tutor is unable to
understand the
Bad fail answers
will be wholly
copied from the
module materials
or other sources.
0-2 marks
examples, but they
should be kept short.
Your answer will use full
sentences throughout,
and these will be
punctuated correctly.
Grammatical and
spelling errors will be
minimal and will not
distract in any way from
the points you are
making.
14-15 marks
A good pass answer will
contain occasional errors
in spelling and grammar
that may distract from the
argument.
It will be punctuated
effectively, although there
may be mistakes in places
that slightly distract the
reader from time to time.
11-13 marks
grammatical and spelling
errors that distract the
reader and make meaning
unclear at times.
7-10 marks
making the answer
difficult to understand.
5-6 marks
points you are
making.
3-4 marks
Criteria and
Weighting
Percentage
Pass 1
Excellent Pass
Pass 2
Good Pass
Pass 3
Clear Pass
Pass 4
Bare Pass
Bare Fail/Fail Bad Fail
Referencing
5 marks
An excellent pass answer
will be correctly
referenced both in terms
of formatting and
placement. The
reference list at the end
of your essay will match
the in-text citations.
5 marks
A good pass answer will be
correctly referenced both
in terms of formatting and
placement. There will be
some minor mistakes with
formatting and placement.
The reference list at the
end of your essay will
A clear pass answer will
attempt to reference,
although there will be
problems with formatting
and placement. Both intext and end references
will be used, but there
may be omissions and the
list of sources at the end
may not match the
A bare pass answer will
contain a reference list
at the end but no in-text
citations or vice-versa.
These are unlikely to be
formatted correctly.
2 marks
If your answer
makes no
attempt to
reference, you
will receive a
mark of zero for
this criterion.
0 marks
largely match the in-text
citations.
4 marks
citations used in the body
of the essay.
3 marks
Writing to
length
Your essay should not exceed the word count by more than 10%. The first time you exceed this word count you will receive a warning. The second time, you
will incur a penalty of 10% of your overall mark.
Essays that are under the word count by more than 10% will not incur a specific penalty. However, they are unlikely to score as highly as they will be
underdeveloped and lack the detail necessary to obtain full marks.
Part 3
15 per cent of overall mark
Reflect upon the entries you have made in your portfolio to evidence your skills. What strengths have you identified that will help you in DD105? Which skills have you
identified as areas for development?
Marks awarded 15 marks 10 marks 5 marks 0 marks
Criteria: Use of portfolio to
evidence strengths and
identify areas for further
development.
Answers awarded 15
points will make direct
reference to your
portfolio and identify
two distinct skills – one
strength and one area
for development.
Your answer will make
full use of the word
count, be written in full
sentences and evidence
from your portfolio will
be used to back up your
points.
It will be clear from
your answer that you
have used your
portfolio to reflect on
your work.
Your answer will identify
two distinct skills – one
strength and one area for
development.
Your answer will be written
in full sentences, but the
discussion may be lacking in
detail. It may also fail to
address both strengths and
weaknesses equally.
It will be clear from your
answer that you have used
your portfolio to reflect on
your work, however this
discussion will be implicit,
and you will not directly
reference the portfolio.
Answers in this band will not
answer all elements of the
question.
For example, your answer may
discuss your skills development in
a general sense rather than
choosing one strength and one
area for development. If an
answer is not written in full
sentences, or falls far short of the
word count, it should also be
awarded 5 points.
Zero marks should only be
awarded for non-submission of
this part of the task.